I think the bill would benefit from some clarity around some of the terms used in paragraph 41.12(1)(a). Particularly "manufacturer" and "product" are terms that are somewhat alien to the Copyright Act. They could deserve some attention in terms of making them gel a bit better; however, it's important that amendments to the language don't essentially deprive the bill of its purpose and effect.
To that end, I think there is some room for improvement there, but I would caution against essentially watering it down into being exactly what's already in the act.