At line 9 there would be a little striking and a little adding. Where it says, “Whereas the Government of Canada welcomes opportunities to work cooperatively with”, I would take out the next word, which is “those”, and the wording would read as follows:
Whereas the Government of Canada welcomes opportunities to work cooperatively with provincial, territorial and municipal governments, Indigenous peoples and other sectors of society towards achieving the objectives of the Declaration;
The amendment is intended to clarify the status of the declaration in Canadian domestic law and align with the government's stated intention that UNDRIP is to be used as an interpretive tool in Canada.